Writing (Essays)
Formal Essay #1 - House On Mango Street Reflection
The prompt for this essay was "In the novella, House on Mango Street, how did Esperanza change? Consider who she is at the beginning of the book and who she becomes by the end of the story."
Thesis
In the beginning, Esperanza wants to escape her life, however by the end she becomes self-assured and wants to come back to Mango Street in order to give the people a voice.
I received a 2 on this essay because my body paragraphs didn't have enough information and it was poorly written. I think that I had a good idea, but wasn't so sure how to put it so it didn't come out as great. The conclusion and commentary still needs improvement. I want my next formal essay to be a 3 and to have good concrete details and commentary.
The prompt for this essay was "In the novella, House on Mango Street, how did Esperanza change? Consider who she is at the beginning of the book and who she becomes by the end of the story."
Thesis
In the beginning, Esperanza wants to escape her life, however by the end she becomes self-assured and wants to come back to Mango Street in order to give the people a voice.
I received a 2 on this essay because my body paragraphs didn't have enough information and it was poorly written. I think that I had a good idea, but wasn't so sure how to put it so it didn't come out as great. The conclusion and commentary still needs improvement. I want my next formal essay to be a 3 and to have good concrete details and commentary.
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Formal Essay #2 - Into the Wild Reflection
The prompt was "After reading and reflecting on the Jon Krakaue's book, Into the Wild, what can be learned from the McCandless' story?"
Thesis
Chris’ story teaches that the joy of life comes from new experiences and testing boundaries.
I received a 2+ on this essay because the essay was more of an idea. I think that my introduction and the quotes I chose were good. The things that need improvement is the the commentary. The revision I made didn't really affect my grade in any way. For writing next year, I would like to get better grades on my essays.
The prompt was "After reading and reflecting on the Jon Krakaue's book, Into the Wild, what can be learned from the McCandless' story?"
Thesis
Chris’ story teaches that the joy of life comes from new experiences and testing boundaries.
I received a 2+ on this essay because the essay was more of an idea. I think that my introduction and the quotes I chose were good. The things that need improvement is the the commentary. The revision I made didn't really affect my grade in any way. For writing next year, I would like to get better grades on my essays.
Timed Writing #1 - Dreams Reflection
I repeated myself a lot and didn't have any transitions. The only thing that I feel like I did somewhat well on, was having close to a page. I also noticed that in my essay, I used "you" and a lot of past tense, and usually in the essays that Erin has us create, we stay in third person, and no past tense. My writing in the beginning is very different from my writing now. I'm glad that Erin kept these essays, because I did not acknowledge how much I have grown as a writer. I have made an incredible amount of improvement. Revisions and practice is necessary and very important, because looking back at essays I have previously done has shown me how important improvement is in life in general.
I repeated myself a lot and didn't have any transitions. The only thing that I feel like I did somewhat well on, was having close to a page. I also noticed that in my essay, I used "you" and a lot of past tense, and usually in the essays that Erin has us create, we stay in third person, and no past tense. My writing in the beginning is very different from my writing now. I'm glad that Erin kept these essays, because I did not acknowledge how much I have grown as a writer. I have made an incredible amount of improvement. Revisions and practice is necessary and very important, because looking back at essays I have previously done has shown me how important improvement is in life in general.